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Cigarettes is one kind of tobacco which actually is one of the most widely-used drugs in the world. It is common in our everyday lives for that there are so many people smoking. However, nowadays more and more people pay much attention to their healthes, so the concept of “Smoking is unhealthy” is accepted by most people who reject in smoking. But there are still over a billion adults legally smoke tobacco every day that will costs a lot both for smokers themselves and for the wider community in terms of health care costs and lost productivity. Do governments have a legitimate role to legislate to protect citizens from the harmful effects of smoking? The answer will be yes for most of people. The first, smoking will do harm for smokers’ health. The second, somking will do harm for people who are around smokers such as families. And smoking is always a lead of a fire desaster. There are many reasons to restrict smoking. The point is how to do this. We know that every policy will make a consequence. If government shut down the tobacco facotories, it will definitely increase the price of cigarettes which will affect smokers—over a billion people—heavily because they won’t change their habit just because there are fewer cigarettes. So I think the government should guide these people not t
 
Explanation: This essay minimally answers the question on the topic. The details and examples do not follow a well-developed logic that supports the test taker’s position on the topic. The essay does not have a good organizational pattern. The introduction rephrases the topic, the body contains minimal supporting points and the conclusion is unfinished. This essay does not receive full credit for grammar usage and spelling because of missing or incorrect use of verbs and nouns. The vocabulary is limited and imprecise. Some words are not appropriate for the context. Spelling errors are numerous. The word count is 227 words.
 
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These days, statistics have shown that all around the world, over a billion adults legally smoke tobacco every day. Also, these numbers are expected to increase if nothing is done. It takes two to stop the numbers arising and therefore, the government and the smokers have to cooperate to make the country smoke-free.
The government should control the amount of smokers as the rising numbers could cause lost productivity and an increase in the crime rate. Campaigns should be created and advertisements using the mass media can actually help the smokers realize the disadvantages of smoking.
 
Besides that, smokers should also learn the gruesome facts on smoking. They should also realize that there’s more to life than just smoking and that people near and dear to them could be affected from their habit. Studies have shown that people who have family members who are smokers can actually contract diseases such as cancer and other lung diseases.
 
Moreover, the increase in the number of smokers can actually mean that there would probably be an increase in crime rates as well. Smoking would then lead to other dangerous issues like drugs, prostitution, theft and even murder. Therefore, the government should act immediately to avoid further damage to society.
 
Certain smokers who want to quit can find it hard to do so and this is when the government’s help can come in handy. That is by increasing the age limit for adolescents to smoke, increasing tax on tobacco products to make it a lot more expensive and also to provide support gropus for smokers who wish to quit.
 
In a nutshell, smoking is indeed a problem to the nation and it takes two to work it out. The government and the smokers themselves should work side by side to solve this issue.
 
Explanation: This essay answers the question on the topic and is well organized. There is a clear introduction, body and conclusion. In the body, the main ideas and details relate to the main point of the essay. However, some main ideas are not well supported with details, examples or explanations.There are obvious grammatical errors in sentences with complex structures. However, most grammatical errors do not hinder communication. Imprecise vocabulary prevents the response from receiving full credit for general linguistic range. The vocabulary range is good and clichés are used sparingly. There are no significant spelling errors. The word count is 299 words.
 
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Tobacco is one of the most widely-used drugs of the world. Over a billion adults legally smoke tobacco every day. Tobacco is slowing taking a billion people in the world towards doom. The long term health costs are high for smokers, who suffer from various heart and lung diseases, reduced concentration and continually diminishing immunity.
 
Non-smokers, accompanying smokers or those who are in their close vicinity, also become “Passive” smokers and bear the toll of various inevitable diseases as they inhale the smoke which has an ill-effect on their respiratory systems. Thus, the health costs are high—for smokers themselves, and for wider community in terms of health care costs and lost productivity.
 
There has been awareness among people from many years, about the ill-effects of smoking and various campaigns run by the government, NGOs and local bodies to encourage people to quit smoking but the result have not been impressive. The solution is to nip the problem in the bud. School authorities and parents should keep a close eye so that children don’t start to smoke because they think it is “cool”. They should be made aware about the harmful effects of smoking.
 
Government could play a vital role too. Smoking should not be high-hand in advertisements and movie commercials which have a huge impact on people. It could levy high taxes on tobacco products to keep people away from its reach. Rules for checking children buying such products should be made stringent.
 
The onus to protect from such products also lie on individuals as will-power always does the trick. The knowledge of importance of being healthy has to be realized from within. It goes a long way to check the problem. Thus, the solution requires both legitimate action of Government and strong individual decisions to eliminate the problem.
 
Explanation: This essay answers the question on the topic. The roles of the government and the individual are well explained and supporting details are provided. There is good development of ideas and a logical structure. The main ideas are introduced in the first paragraph and the test taker’s answer to the question is restated in the conclusion. General linguistic range and vocabulary range are excellent. The vocabulary is precise and expresses subtleties and nuances. Idioms are also used appropriately. Minor grammatical errors prevent this response from receiving full credit for grammar usage and mechanics, although the intended meaning of the sentences is clear. Spelling is excellent.The word count is 300 words.



Item-2

 Some people believe that human behavior can be changed by laws; others argue that laws have little effect on human behavior. Which opinion do you agree with? Please explain.

参考范文:

Introduction:
  It is argued heatedly about whether human behaviors could be altered by laws. In my opinion, I think that legislations would definitely have this effects.

Body1:
  It is reasonable for me to believe that laws can change people’s behavior. In my opinion, if people know the punishment of various laws, they would be very unlikely to commit crimes, because no one would enjoy those penalties. In other words, human’s behaviors are, in some senses, altered by law. Furthermore, some legislations may encourage good behaviour of people, such as helping those victims when they are suffering from illegal crimes. This, in my view, may also change people’s actions.

Body2:
  In contrast, perhaps others may believe that laws have little effect on human behavior, and the reasons could be that potential criminals might think the police are not able to find them among the increasing populations in many countries. Nevertheless, in my opinion, this does not sound very convincing, because I think the power of the police has also been strengthened, especially in the scientific field. With the help of Internet and other advanced technologies, such as security cameras, it is more unlikely for potential criminals to break laws and they should be more careful for their behaviors.

Conclusion:
  In conclusion, I strongly believe that laws could influence people and change their behaviors.


写作思路:

  就这道题而言,最快速,最常见的方法就是选择一种观点并进行论证。因为很难中立,你不能说law即能change behavior, 又是没什么作用的。所以这里我们最方便的就是一边倒。那比如我们选择赞成laws can change people's behavior,但我们同样可以用have little effect 来进行论证反驳,这样你既不用担心自己没东西可写,又能够使文章更加出彩。所以文章的大纲可以表述如下:
Introduction: I agree that law can alter people's behavior
Body1: can be changed by laws (理由:commit crimes would lead to punishment which deter people from breaking laws)
Body2: perhaps somebody may argue that …. little effect + 反驳 (理由:populations are booming, and there may be not enough police force to deal with crime, but development of science and technology could make it arrangement possible)

 
 

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